When I and my family went to the Italy we had to wake up 4.00 a.m. It was so early and I was so tired, but I was really excited because I love going abroad. I had been in Italy two years ago so Italy wasn´t so new place for me. I had missed Italian food because that is best food in the whole world.
When we came to the Italy It was hot but stormy. It rained only one hour and that´s it. We went to the beach and bought some ice-cream. Italian ice cream is really delicious and I have ever ate anything like that. It is the best ice-cream in the whole world. I wasn´t tired anymore because sunny and hot weather made me happy.
In the evening we went to the restaurant and I ate pizza which was damn good. Everybody watched Italy-Germany match and Italy won. It was time to celebrate. Everyone were very glad but German tourists were depressed. We went to the hotel over midnight. It was long but lovely day of my life!
A Day to Remember 
September 12, 2012 at 4:49 pm
Very nice post ! 🙂 Your text was easy and fun to read because your english was easy to understand and your paragraphing was well done. The best part was the second section because it was so cheerful and i could just picture myself in there. 🙂 About your grammar i can’t say that much because i don’t speak so good english myself 😀 Maybe a picture or two would have been nice so we all could have seen what it was like in Italy 🙂 It was nice to hear about your summer vacation trip. 🙂
September 23, 2012 at 2:34 pm
English, I (capital letters!) 🙂
September 23, 2012 at 2:44 pm
Structurally the story is fine; there are the three needed paragrahps (one for the beginning, middle and ending) and I just LOVE the topic you had chosen. 😉 I totally agree with you on the fact that Italian food is the best food on Earth! (including ice cream too, of course)
The storyline, however, could have been a bit more exciting. You could have developed a real climax out of this match between Italy and Germany by creating some suspense before that. You could have delayed the final result of the game by, for example, talking about the atmosphere in the restaurant during the match.Then you could have described the bitter and sweet sensations after the match more in detail. After all, the whole Italy goes nuts when they win, doesn’t it?
Otherwise, this is a good story, the language fluent and easy going and the grammar ok.
-_ Italy (no article before it)
-wake up AT four
-two years before
-such a new place
-THE Italian food
-it rained only for an hour
-THE Italian ice cream
-I have NEVER EATEN
-A pizza (articles)
-watched the match between Italy and Germany, and
-Everyone WAS
-THE German tourists
-way past midnight
-It was one long
Anyways, you wrote way better than last time! 🙂 So, good job!
Media appearance: I agree with your opponent; some pictures would have been nice!